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Monday, August 12, 2013

Sarbjit Singh : spring season ~ a lamp is lighting in the dark night

Sarbjit Singh

spring season ~
a lamp is lighting
in the dark night

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Sarbjit Singh

ਬਸੰਤ ਬਹਾਰ -
ਇੱਕ ਦੀਪਕ ਦਾ ਪ੍ਰਕਾਰ ਹੈ
ਹਨੇਰੀ ਰਾਤ 'ਚ

March 12 at 8:48am via mobile · Like · 1
Jagraj Singh Norway ਪ੍ਰਕਾਰ =ਪ੍ਰਕਾਸ਼

March 12 at 12:39pm · Unlike · 2
Sarbjit Singh Can't read whatever written in Punjabi

March 12 at 12:44pm via mobile · Like · 1
Jagraj Singh Norway parkaar= parkaash

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Sarbjit Singh Thanks Veer!!

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Deepi Sair So far I know, in English 'version'we are not allowed to use 'ing' in phrase thanx

March 12 at 6:19pm · Like · 1
Sarbjit Singh Deep. I don't think so...only rule is, it should be in present tense ...that is present tense.

March 13 at 8:59am via mobile · Like
Dalvir Gill where is this "Book of Rules"??!!!

March 13 at 1:16pm · Like · 1
Deepi Sair I will be back soon.....haaa,haaa Dalvir Gill veer

March 14 at 4:55pm · Like
Dalvir Gill there are so many "schools" of haiku. here's one : http://haikulok.blogspot.ca/p/blog-page.html

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Dalvir Gill Published work of Shri Janmeja Singh Johl : http://haikulok.blogspot.com.au/2012/10/blog-post_9.html

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Deepi Sair Haiku, which seem so light, free and spontaneous, are built on discipline. If you've a desire to write
As soon as you get proficient (you will notice your haiku all sound alike) it's time to raise the tennis net by picking a new rule or so, either from this list or one you've made up from reading and admiring other haiku, or, and this is possible and not treason, from other poetry genre.
Here we go:
1. Seventeen syllables in one line.
2. Seventeen syllables written in three lines.
3. Seventeen syllables written in three lines divided into 5-7-5.
4. Seventeen syllables written in a vertical (flush left or centered) line.
5. Less than 17 syllables written in three lines as short-long-short.
17. Eliminating all the possible uses of gerunds (ing endings on wording).

March 14 at 5:11pm · Like · 2
Deepi Sair From bare bones school of haiku , I cut it short for you

March 14 at 5:12pm · Like
Deepi Sair No. 17

March 14 at 5:13pm · Like
Sarbjit Singh Which one you like Deep ???

March 14 at 5:13pm · Like
Dalvir Gill did you hear that I said at least 30 schools of haiku. everyone thinks his idea of "What's haiku" is the only right one. All this is included in Jane's write-up "Haiku Rules that have Come and Gone", it has been translated by Kuljeet Mann.

March 14 at 5:15pm · Like · 2
Dalvir Gill the one you mentioned is also included ( as # 17 ) under the ones that have "Come and Gone." Hokku people ( Sandip Sital Chauhan has written some beautiful hokku in their workshop on FB ) believe that not Kigo but Zoka is essential for Hokku and Basho didn't write any haiku but only hokku. I am also stuck with some "Goners" namely #25 and #26 but give it a quick read. https://www.facebook.com/groups/395117723895075/doc/396468617093319/

March 14 at 5:31pm · Like · 1
Deepi Sair When I started learning abt haiku, this was the first book I studied... So I will never forget it, I don't write in English so for me doesn't make any difference .....

March 14 at 5:40pm · Like
Dalvir Gill you must remember Buta Singh Wakif ( the 5-7-5 guy ). we have his Canadian counterpart : http://members.shaw.ca/kcic1/myhaiku.html

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Dalvir Gill Deepi Sair bai, like Buddha said, "It's harder to unlearn than it is to learn." I'm listening to you attentively, there could be something new there for me. I beg you to listen to me and continue to communicate.

March 14 at 5:45pm · Like · 1
Dalvir Gill I didn't lay any rules for haiku but did so only for this group. I can't make if it was good or bad luck that you can't forget/unlearn your first book but read more ( personally I'm not into reading any more ) and draw a synthesis instead of just borrowing and memorizing certain rules.

March 14 at 5:48pm · Like
Deepi Sair I am confuse myself , I do write few everyday but i don't post, sure I am learner it's very healthy to communicate with each

March 14 at 5:49pm · Like
Dalvir Gill using this list of haiku any haiku, even by classical masters can be refuted. in this particular haiku lighting ( a synonym for alit, alight ) is not really an active verb ( though it is a verb alright ) as much it is an adjective telling the property of the lamp that it is not dead but is alight. changing the lighting to alight is not going to change a thing for me, but if it helps, "lighting" can be changed with "alight". Here!

March 14 at 5:57pm · Like · 1
Deepi Sair In second line is there any possibility to use just "lighting lamp". ਇੱਕ ਦੀਪਕ ਪ੍ਰਕਾਸ਼ try may be you like it thanx Sarbjit Singh veer

March 14 at 5:59pm · Like · 1
Deepi Sair It's a beautiful haiku, thus why we spending lots of energy on it.. alight is a good idea

March 14 at 6:04pm · Like · 1
Dalvir Gill instead of talking on a haiku I'm focusing on Haiku and the Rules.

March 14 at 6:06pm · Like · 1
Dalvir Gill We shall talk this to the end. Similarly, the "Personification in Haiku" where everybody seems to agree that this is just another "Western Conceptualization" but every now and then an objection is raised. I suggest only Reading the Masters, I do that too often, almost daily. There is a huge selection of them in the group documents.

March 14 at 6:07pm · Like · 1